Revising and Editing the Essay on Communicating as a Professional

Engineers in hard hats

1. "Communicating as a Professional." This essay is not about JUST good grammar in the professional workplace, although that is an important aspect of professional communication, which is why that is the topic of the first body paragraph. However, the essay is about more than just "good grammar," so the introductory paragraph needs to be an overview of the ENTIRE content of the essay, not just focusing on grammar alone.

2. Introductory Paragraphs. Read about the Do's and Don'ts of introductory paragraphs. Here's a big "Don't":

3. YOU must go! Second person point of view is bossy, preachy, sloppy, amateurish, unnecessary, easy to fix, and it destroys a writer's credibility.

4. Oral/verbal. These two words are not necessarily synonymous. While one of the lower listed definitions of "verbal" relates to "verbal agreements" as spoken rather than written contracts, "verbal" more broadly means communication through the use of words. So written texts are also "verbal" communication. To avoid confusion and to show awareness of the differences in meaning, refer to spoken communication as "oral" rather than "verbal."

5. Works Cited and parenthetical citations must follow MLA conventions and formats. In the Little Seagull Handbook go to the section called "Research" and then "MLA Style." The first 17 lines show examples of parenthetical citations from a variety of sources. View those samples. The works cited entries for the types of online sources we are using are listed in models 30-35 in list of works cited section. Follow those. And also view the sample research paper so that you know what your essay should look like.

6. Weins and Adams. This paragraph was already graded and marked for corrections and improvement. In many cases no revisions were made after I marked those paragraphs separately. If such is the case, your grade was lowered because I already provided feedback on how to correct and improve that paragraph. In it, you MUST identify who the writers are: "In the Adams article, she says that . . . " is meaningless to your readers because they have no idea what or whom you are referring to.

7. S-6a in the Little Seagull Handbook. This rule stipulates that pronouns must agree in number with the words they replace: "A professional nurse should improve their grammar in order to communicate clearly with their patients." A nurse is one person, so she would communicate with her patients (or his patients). Multiple nurses is a plural, so they would communicate with their patients. Work the exercises at the bottom of that section of the handbook and also work the InQuizitive lessons on pronoun agreement.

8. Quotation marks with other punctuation: Commas and periods go inside of close quote marks. Here is why.

9. Read this sample essay, "Communicating as a Professional" by Kaitlyn Evans, Spring 2016.